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PostSubject: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 5:16 pm

I know it's kind of random but I made a JUS sprite of my character, Sean Raider.
This is idle v2 and I want to get any constructive criticism.
The first frame is a minor edit of killua but the others are pretty major.
I will take any criticism and try to fix it.
Thanks.
And also, the white around the sword was an accident, ignore it please.

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PostSubject: Re: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 6:15 pm

Well, the legs sort of grow. If ya know what I mean.

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PostSubject: Re: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 6:21 pm

The thing that stands out the most is that the legs look like they are made out of jello. Especially the right one (our left). Also, the right foot looks kind of odd. The other thing to fix would be the sword. If you hadn't told me it was a sword, I probably wouldn't have guessed.

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PostSubject: Re: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 6:58 pm

Yeah, unless he's a Hitmonlee in disguise, I'd say change the legs.

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PostSubject: Re: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:04 pm

Ok, like what, would I make it so they're closer together? So that they don't bend as much? MAke them bend in a different place? What should I do?
Also, I know the sword is bad, I'm probably going to find another sword sprite and edit it.

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PostSubject: Re: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:08 pm

They bend a little too much, and a little too far down. Nice work.

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PostSubject: Re: How's this look?   Fri Aug 20, 2010 10:05 pm

The right one (our left) bends in the wrong direction, unless I'm mistaken.

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